this image has a lot of potential. Let me start first with the things that I think make this work. It has well defined layers of depth, foreground- middle- background. I like the way that the "hole" in the wall frames your subject. Also, you have a nice highlight on your subject coming from the background. honestly, there are only a couple things that would separate this from an image that I would take similarly and i think thats why your attracted to my work but thats a whole other philisophical art discussion that we'll save for later lol. Now, the things i would have done differently... As you probably already may have observed if you shoot manual settings on your camera (which I do exclusively), photography is a trade off. If you need more light to stop action you need a higher iso rating sensitivity and in turn you have greater noise levels from analog to digital amplification. I see that was probably the case here (you shooting iso1600). Either you have to accept the blur w/ a slower shutter, use camera support, add strobes or use some other technique such as digital blending/compositing. ok, so i'm straying from the orig critique here but stick w/ me. Compositionally, your subject throws the image off balance here... the way she is faced into the frame along w/ the heavier tones on the left side of the image creates an unpleasing composition. you had a few options here, whether it be her looking back over her shoulder to the right or faced directly at the camera, whatever it might be to bring a bit more balance to the image but at the same time gets across your artistic vision. remember that when shooting models, the pose and the person is just as much YOUR art as the wall behind her, be careful of the "pose", even w/ photojournalism its my experience that observing behavior will ultimately lead to your ability to control your composition. (there are instances where an unpleasing composition might be what you want, but i dont think it supports this image well and if unpleasing was what you were going for you'd have to change a lot here-a whole other can of worms) the other things i would mention, which i dont know if you've gotten to this level on the tech side of things yet is the poor colour/white balance and the unsettling lens compression.... two cents, i hope that wasn't too much

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thanks so much. Now THAT was a comment. wow. i will try to learn from this. thanks

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